Aet Lindling

As many people have done, you have fallen into the trap of trying to hard to make your poem rhyme. Rhyme schemes don't always have to be used, most poems ...

This is pretty much exactly what I think whenever I see a robin's egg cracked open on the ground. Pretty cool poem. With that said, there are some parts that ...

You have nice imagery and descriptions, I liked "airy globes", but it seems like you don't go very far with this idea. The ending is a proper ending, don't add ...

This doesn't seem so much like a poem about death as it does an essay. You switch moods around the end, at first you're asking questions and you should find ...

This has a poor flow to it. You obviously tried to make everything rhyme, and this usually isn't advisable. Rhyming is forced by nature, and unless you can really make ...

On a second reading I found I was kind of fond of this poem. It's got several layers, I actually thought it was about modern, bad, music when I first ...

Nope, I don’t feel it. This is emo poetry, and emo poetry is all fine for pouring out emotion and making you feel better, but it isn’t meant to be ...

Alfreto, if you've made it up, regardless of if it "could happen" or not, it isn't Non-Fiction. This is straight up Fiction. Also, don't try to explain away a good ...

Pretty much everything XYZinnia said in her review is correct except for one small mistake I want to point out: Each with a dozen curls. no more, no less. I ...

Er, you pretty much copied the idea. Chain, hair, comb... People have reused the Gift of the Magi idea, but this isn't reusing. You didn't implement it correctly, even. The ...

Demetri, you've done it again. Those commas are not meant to be there. Take them out. They're completely ridiculous. Who, threw the rock, that landed, on Jim? The rock, whose ...

Oh, my apologies for having a personality. I'll watch out for that. :) Oh, nice save. Not.

To be quite honest, this is basically one giant cliche. There are many poems that just talk about how nice things are nicer or bad things become nice when they ...

I am going to tell you my honest thoughts on this poem. I am not trying to be mean, but if I withheld what I thought just to be polite ...

Wow, people who like twilight are on this forum? Haha, it's just that I was on this other writers forum and everyone there was weird and completely jealous of stephenie ...